This is your first? Well, it doesn't show. Nice job! Nice job on Chloe's voice too. Chloe has grown so much in these 10 seasons that I think it's hard to reverse it and write her as a teenager. I love the idea of putting Lex, Chloe, Clark and Oliver all together at high school, seems like a volatile mix!
I also didn't catch grammar mistakes or anything, so I think you're safe even without a beta. I only caught one typo. "Chloe spun on her heal", I think that was supposed to be heel.
So, nice job, hope to see more soon!
Also, because I've no shame, I'd loooove to see some hurt/comfort in this fic somewhere along the way. Maybe Chloe gets hurt or needs rescue and instead of being saved by the alien bff, she's saved by the blonde billionaire. lol... I've just remembered how often Chloe would require a trip to the hospital in the early seasons. =D
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Date: 2011-02-12 05:00 am (UTC)I also didn't catch grammar mistakes or anything, so I think you're safe even without a beta. I only caught one typo. "Chloe spun on her heal", I think that was supposed to be heel.
So, nice job, hope to see more soon!
Also, because I've no shame, I'd loooove to see some hurt/comfort in this fic somewhere along the way. Maybe Chloe gets hurt or needs rescue and instead of being saved by the alien bff, she's saved by the blonde billionaire. lol... I've just remembered how often Chloe would require a trip to the hospital in the early seasons. =D