That was absolutely the most amazing piece of smut writing, I have ever read. It was sweet and hot and totally endearing.
It shone through every line how much love they have for each other and how much they both care and want this to be a good experience. You stayed very true to both Chloe and Oliver being virgins. Yeah I said Oliver being a virgin!! Because in many ways he really is. It was his first time with someone he loves and it was like his past experiences was almost a burden to him, because he feared that he would feel the same emptyness with Chloe as he had with the other women. But the way you described his revalation about that definitely not being true was amazing. I can't stress enough how little you have to fear about being a first time smut writer, because you just wrote the hell out of this one!!
Ohh and ending the chapter with Lois and Clark - awesome! Lois finding some dirt on Lex, hmmm could this be the start of some serious investigation, where it might be handy with some extra help, say by someone with extraordinary powers themselves? *jumps up and down impatiencely* Okay what I'm really asking is, will we be seeing Victor and AC and the start of the Justice League here too? Pretty please *puppy eyes*
Last but not least; did I tell you that I love this story? Because I do, seriously LOVE IT..:)))))
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Date: 2011-05-26 07:25 pm (UTC)It shone through every line how much love they have for each other and how much they both care and want this to be a good experience. You stayed very true to both Chloe and Oliver being virgins. Yeah I said Oliver being a virgin!! Because in many ways he really is. It was his first time with someone he loves and it was like his past experiences was almost a burden to him, because he feared that he would feel the same emptyness with Chloe as he had with the other women. But the way you described his revalation about that definitely not being true was amazing. I can't stress enough how little you have to fear about being a first time smut writer, because you just wrote the hell out of this one!!
Ohh and ending the chapter with Lois and Clark - awesome! Lois finding some dirt on Lex, hmmm could this be the start of some serious investigation, where it might be handy with some extra help, say by someone with extraordinary powers themselves? *jumps up and down impatiencely* Okay what I'm really asking is, will we be seeing Victor and AC and the start of the Justice League here too? Pretty please *puppy eyes*
Last but not least; did I tell you that I love this story? Because I do, seriously LOVE IT..:)))))